GETTING PAST THE FIVE-PARAGRAPH ESSAY        

For the past four or five years, most of you have been taught to create a three-pronged thesis and a five-paragraph essay.This format will continue to be invaluable to you—throughout college—for timed, in-class writing. However, for out-of-class writing, and especially for longer assignments, the rigid, five-paragraph format is seldom adequate.Instead, you will have to rely on your judgment, experience, and common sense to determine paragraphing of an organized and focused paper.The following rules will help you stick to your thesis and keep your writing organized while you practice creative paragraphing
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1.      Your thesis must be arguable and as specific as possible, whether it has zero or four “prongs”

2.      Each topic sentence must be arguable and must relate directly back to your thesis

3.      Try to include a transition at the beginning of each paragraph and a summary sentence at the close of each paragraph

4.      Begin a new paragraph as you introduce each major new idea

5.      Paragraphs that are close to two typed pages (about 300-350 words) are often unwieldy; reread an abnormally long paragraph to see if it needs to be cut into two or more shorter paragraphs

6.      You may discuss more than one piece of textual evidence in a paragraph, if in doing so, you maintain

paragraph unity (follow suggestions 1-5, above).See “Example One.”

7.    You may discuss more than one source in a single paragraph, if in doing so, you maintain paragraph

unity (follow suggestions 1-5, above).See “Example Two.”                                                                              

8.    You may analyze a single quote in as many paragraphs as are necessary.There is no

       rule that states you must have one paragraph per quote. The analysis of a particularly rich quote

       might easily extend through two or more paragraphs.In such situations, simply follow suggestions    

       1-5, above.See “Example Three.”

Study the outline below to see how you might write a six-page paper on The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn without using either a divided thesis or a five-paragraph essay.This is only one possibility.Your options are countless!

            Example A

 

Thesis: In The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, Twain’s social criticism is apparent in several ironic

passages that reveal Huck’s individual conscience to be superior to society’s moral codes.

A.     In a corrupt environment, an honest man must often practice small deceptions to effect good, and thus Huck counters his society’s cruelty and selfishness by telling white lies.

      *telling white lies about rich Jim Hornback’s niece being on Sir Walter Scott so that intended murder

       victim will be rescued (73)

B.     Huck, instinctively recognizing that most people are wholly self-centered and that slavery is a terrible

        injustice, must lie again to save his new friend Jim from the horrors of slavery.

        *Huck tells the men that his father, suffering from small pox, is on the raft. As Huck knew they

         would, the men flee.Ironically, Huck has been conditioned by his society to feel guilty, when in fact

         he has behaved virtuously: “They went off and I got aboard the raft, feeling bad and low, because

         I knowed very well that I had done wrong, and I could see that it warn’t no use for me to try to learn

         to do right” (89).

C.     Twain also uses Huck’s innocence ironically to point out society’s hypocrisy and cruelty.

        *The Grangerfords and Shepherdsons go to church together on Sunday morning.They take their

         guns to church and lean on them during the sermon on brotherly love (106).Once out of church,

         they begin to kill one another.Only Huck, who ran away from the widow so he would not have to

          attend church, is disturbed by the savage behavior (112)

D.     Twain again uses irony to suggest the superiority of the individual’s moral conscience over society’s

moral code when Huck, conditioned by his society to believe that he is going to hell for helping to free Jim, chooses hell over the betrayal of a friend.

        *“’There was the Sunday-school you could a gone to it; and if you’d a done it they’d a learnt you there

        that people that acts as I’d been acting about that nigger goes to everlasting fire’” (205).

Conclusion: With humor and irony, Twain seems to suggest that man is capable of virtue only when he has the courage to reject the corrupting influence of his society.

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Example One: single paragraph that analyzes two pieces of textual evidence (may be two quotes, two paraphrases, or one quote

and one paraphrase)

Topic Sentence: Ironically, Twain presents Huck’s virtue through white lies that the boy must tell to transform humanity’s greed and self-interest into compassionate behavior.

Introduce and cite first evidence: quote or paraphrase (73): Huck says that Jim Hornback’s niece

is on the wrecked steamboat because he knows the men can be motivated only by their greed for money, not by kindness or compassion.Fully develop analysis of first evidence to expose irony of lying as a virtue. Summary sentence of first analysis: In a corrupt society, the innocent and compassionate boy can motivate adults to virtuous behavior only by telling fibs that appeal to their greed .Transition and introduction to second evidence: In an extension of this irony, Huck must also fib, in an appeal to man’s self-interest, for compassion’s triumph over social injustice. Introduce and cite second evidence: quote or paraphrase(89): men running away instead of helping when Huck fibs that his father in on board with small pox. Fully develop analysis of second evidence to expose irony that Huck, the supposedly sinful liar of the passage, is, in fact, the virtuous individual single-handedly fighting against the cruel social injustice of slavery. He is able to manipulate the men’s selfish lack of compassion to prevent Jim’s capture. Summary sentence for entire paragraph: Huck’s painful guilt over what is, in fact, virtuous and compassionate behavior exposes the strength of society’s influence; fortunately, Huck’s individual conscience triumphs over society’s inconsistent and twisted moral code.

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Example Twosingle paragraph that analyzes more than one source

Please excuse spacing and format, which do not follow MLA format

Topic Sentence: should make a specific and arguable statement that applies to both works.

In Hawthorne’s “Rappaccini’s Daughter” and in Irving’s “The Legend of Sleepy Hollow,” gothic qualities are diluted by calling into question the reliability of a witness’s perception.

Introduce and cite evidence from first work: One afternoon, Giovanni grows suspicious as observes Beatrice through his window. “With these words, the beautiful daughter of Rappaccini plucked one of the richest blossoms of the shrub, and was about to fasten it to her bosom.But now, unless Giovanni’s draughts of wine had bewildered his senses, a singular incident occurred. A small orange-colored reptile of the lizard or chameleon species chanced to be creeping along the path, just at the feet of Beatrice.It appeared to Giovanni—but, at the distance from which he gazed, he could scarcely have seen anything so minute—it appeared to him, however, that a drop or two of moisture from the broken stem of the flower descended upon the lizard’s head. For an instant, the reptile contorted itself violently, and then lay motionless in the sunshine”(1235).Fully develop analysis of evidence from first source: the supernatural quality of the flower can be explained away by Giovanni’s distance and/or drunkeness—if Giovanni is an unreliable witness, the supernatural (gothic) doesn’t necessarily exist. Summary of analysis of first source: Hawthorne can make the supernatural less threatening by rendering it less real, less certain. Transition to next work:In a similar fashion, Irving minimizes the supernatural in “The Legend of Sleepy Hollow” by portraying Ichabod as a frightened, gullible, and unreliable witness. Introduce and cite evidence from second work: Ichabod’s experience with the ghost occurs in the darkness of night and at a time when  Ichabod’s imagination and fear are both in overdrive. “The hair of the affrighted pedagogue rose upon his head with terror….Though the night was dark and dismal, yet the form of the unknown might now in some degree be ascertained. He appeared to be a horseman of large dimensions…” (926). Fully develop analysis of evidence from second work: Ichabod is frightened and it is too dark to see clearly—Ichabod never actually sees the headless horsemen (and next day the townsmen find a smashed pumpkin next to the hat that the Hessian supposedly knocked off Ichabod with its decapitated head, etc.) : because the reader knows that Ichabod is gullible and, in fact, cannot be trusted as a witness, she soon also knows that the Headless Horseman was really Brom Bones playing a trick; the supernatural (gothic) is explained away and the result is laughter, not fright. Summary sentence for entire paragraph: Both Hawthorne and Irving develop their gothic stories in an ambiguous light by calling into question the reliability of characters who witness supernatural events.
 

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Example Threemore than one paragraph analyzing a single quote.

First Topic Sentence: Twain’s irony clearly suggests that the individual’s conscience is superior to society’s moral code when Huck, deciding not to return Jim, believes that he is both a sinner and a hypocrite. Introduce Quote:Just before Huck tears up the letter that would return Jim to Miss Watson, Huck muses, Quote: And I about made up my mind to pray, and see if I couldn’t try to quit being the kind of boy I was and be better.So I kneeled down.But the words wouldn’t come.Why wouldn’t they?It warn’t no use to try and hide it from Him.Not from me, neither. I knowed very well why they wouldn’t come.It was because my heart warn’t right; it was because I warn’t square; it was because away inside of me I was holding on to the biggest one of all.I was trying to make my mouth say I would do the right thing and the clean thing, and go and write to that nigger’s owner and tell where he was; but deep down in me I knowed it was a lie, and He knowed it.You can’t pray a lie—I found that out. (205)

Develop full analysis (at least twice as long as quote) here.Examine first irony (Huck’s painful guilt and self-examination in thinking that he is committing a terrible sin by practicing compassion.)Conclude with a summary sentence that sums up the main point of your analysis.

Second Topic Sentence (with transition): Perhaps even more significantly, the passage exposes society’s hypocrisy by contrasting it with Huck’s innate integrity. Develop full analysis of contrast between Huck’s insistence on integrity—continuity between heart and words—and society’s hypocrisy—simultaneous promotion of brotherly love and slavery. Summary sentence may sum up this paragraph only, OR sum up both paragraphs’ analysis of the quote.

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Example B

Model Outline for AP Summer Reading Paper: Synthesizing Analysis of 3 Primary Sources

Note: There are countless other ways to order the same information to develop and support the same thesis.This year, you should experiment with many different ways of organizing as you practice your paragraphing skills in getting beyond the five-paragraph essay.Below is an example an outline for a 7-paragraph essay that would be 6-7 pages long. Each capital letter indicates a body paragraph.

Thesis: The three novelists use images of confinement to suggest that characters feel trapped by a society that controls them without understanding them.

A.     In Jude the Obscure and Madame Bovary, windows often suggest a freedom from conventional marriage that the individual can envision but cannot achieve.

1.      Sue jumps out the window when Phillotson comes to her bed—but he retrieves her and returns her to her confinement

2.      “Twice a day Leon went from his office to the Lion d’Or.Emma could watch him coming from afar; she leant forward listening, and the young man glided past the curtain, always dressed the same way, and without turning his head. But in the twilight, when, her chin resting on her left hand, she let her begun embroidery fall on her knees, she often shuddered at the apparition of this shadow suddenly gliding past.She would get up and order the table laid “(Flaubert 69).

B.     Dostoevsky’s protagonist Raskolnikov, feels society’s oppression in a more intense and pervasive sense, as suggested by the fact that his small, airless flat seems to have no windows.

1.      “His little room, more like a cupboard than a place to live in, was tucked away under the roof of the high five-storied building”(Dostoevsky 1).

2.      “Why are you looking around my room?Mama here says it is like a coffin” (Dostoevsky 202).

C.     Flaubert and Hardy also use images of partially closed windows, in conjunction with references to restrained nature, to suggest restrictions imposed upon human nature by the traditions and doctrines of organized religion.

1.      Jude, after mercifully killing the trapped rabbit, seizes Sue’s hand through the open window and exclaims, “‘There is a stronger one left’! he said. ‘I’ll never care about my doctrines or my religion any more!Let them go!Let me help you, even if I do love you, and even if you…’”(Hardy 170).

2.      Madame Bovary tries unsuccessfully to repress her adulterous yearnings by becoming a religious zealot. The moment of inspiration for her fleeting transformation is recounted-- “One evening when she was sitting by an open window, watching Lestiboudois, the sexton, trim the boxwood, she suddenly heard the ringing of the Angelus”(Flaubert 78).

D.     Just as the trimming of the boxwood and the painful entrapment of the rabbit suggest nature defeated

        by religious conventions, Hardy and Flaubert use natural settings and landscapes to suggest literal

        and figurative escape from restraint .

1.      To escape punishment from her strict school, Sue jumps through a window and into a river to reach her illicit companion, Jude.

2.      Conversely, when Emma’s adulterous inclinations are temporarily thwarted by Rodolphe’s departure,

she falls ill and her habits at the window change.“Madame Bovary’s convalescence was slow.On good days they wheeled her arm-chair to the window that overlooked the square, for she now disliked the garden, and the blinds on that side were always down.She wanted her horse to be sold; what she formerly liked now displeased her” (Flaubert 153).

E.      Dostoevsky’s broader vision of confinement as extending beyond a single cause--such as religious,

        marital, or financial constraint—is apparent when not Raskolnikov, but his mother, comments to

        Dunya: “’It will be good for him to go out and get a breath of air…it’s terribly close in his room…but

        where can one get fresh air here?Even in the streets it is like an unventilated room…stop; move out

        of the way!You will be crushed; they are carrying something.Why it is actually a pianoforte!How

        they push!’” (Dostoevsky203).

 

 

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